Assignment four – response to tutor feedback

Overall Comments

Janet, this is a good attempt at the assignment and has given you some valued experience working in a fully equipped studio, many students do not have access to a studio so this assignment should not only test the students’ technical abilities but also their resourcefulness.

You could have tried a little more variation with the positioning of the subject camera; many of the images have the camera in the same position for example. However I do think you have explored some of the possibilities of studio lighting well and hopefully the module has proved worthwhile in allowing you to move on with your technical skills.

Assessment Potential (after Assignment 4)

I understand your aim is to go for the Photography Degree and that you plan to submit your work for assessment at the end of this course. From the work you have shown in this assignment, providing you commit yourself to the course, I believe you have the potential to succeed at assessment. In order to meet all the assessment criteria, there are certain areas you will need to focus on, which I will outline in my feedback.  

 Feedback On Assignment

shape1

The first shape example would probably have worked better in the landscape format allowing for the full reflection of the camera to be seen in the frame, the portrait format is a little problematic in this case. The background also needs some thought, here the light fall out renders it a two tone grey and it detracts a little from the main subject. Agreed. I will re-shoot this one in landscape but include the whole reflection. Change of background too.

vintage camera 028

The second example works a little better but you have still cropped half of the reflection out, rather than trying to show the whole of the camera you could have concentrated on particular parts – here for example the area around the bellows looks interesting, the high contrast lighting helping to bring out particular shapes. Re-shoot, trying just the bellows.

form1     form2

The first form example is a straightforward ‘pack’ shot that shows the viewer detailed areas of the camera; it is a well lit shot although you would generally try and eliminate all of the shadow areas in a high key image such as this. I think you need to get a little closer to the subject in the second form example, the frame proportions mean that the viewer is distracted by the split background and the camera (in this position) seems too flat. Does this mean the image as a whole seems too flat, or the photo gives a “flat” i.e. not a 3D view of the image?…..Thinking about tutor comment on variation and re-positioning of subject camera? Perhaps re-shoot, get in close, without split background….

texture1    texture2

You really need to be using a decent macro lens for the style of texture examples that you have produced here, although the first example works to a point the second one needs a little more work – I would have thought the leather bellows could have worked well as an example of texture coupled with say the front of the lens of the camera? No macro lens, but may be able to borrow one….or experiment with other options eg. macro facility on my compact digital camera.

colour1      colour2

Your experiments with the different coloured gels highlights the possibilities of studio lighting – although I’m not sure that this technique brings out the best in the actual colour of the subject camera? I took the idea of using coloured gels from George’s gas pipe! (one of the student’s work my tutor suggested I looked at). These and the final shot are variations of the form example in terms of composition – the assessors will really be looking for more variation when they are looking over your work. If possible I would try and re-shoot a couple of images, not necessarily in the studio, you could use natural light or any light source for that matter. Contacted the tutor for clarity and more constructive feedback especially around “more variation…..re-shoot a couple of images”?

Learning Log/Blog/Suggested Reading/Viewing/ Pointers For The Next Assignment

Your learning log and research make for interesting reading and I would try and keep to this standard for the fifth assignment. The final assignment is a good chance to put a fairly substantial piece of work together and by using your learning log as the research based piece of work, this can allow the final assignment to develop quite quickly.

 

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